Hello and welcome back to my blog. This week for reading we had to do the last task of our novel study slides. This week we had to do the synthesising task. We had to write down about three of the different characters and then what they have in common. I have also done all the other task and had to put them on a slide. Here is the slide.
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Thursday, September 24, 2020
Our novel study slides for the Book Thief!
Wednesday, September 23, 2020
Trying out for cantamath! Part 5!
Writing info-graphic about quality education!
Our work on the Book Thief!
Trying out for Cantamath! Part 4!
Thursday, September 10, 2020
Markus Zusak's The Book Thief!
Writing Speech Rubric.The criteria of our speeches!
Persuasive Writing Self Assessment
Assess your persuasive writing against each nonfiction shape below.
Provide both a comment and some evidence from your speech to show how you have met the specified criteria.
If you don’t believe you have met this criteria, provide a comment for how you could do this better next time.
Non-Fiction Shape | Areas for improvement | Criteria | Evidence of meeting and/or exceeding the Criteria |
Hard Hitting Statistics | Next time I think I could add a couple more rhetorical questions. | I have included rhetorical questions, facts and hard hitting statistics in the introduction of my writing. | I think that I did well including facts and rhetorical questions because my first paragraph is got a bit of both. Here is an example: “How would you feel if you didn’t have a good education and ended up living in poverty for the rest of your life? Well, did you know that around 103 million children worldwide lack basic literacy skills, and more than 60 per cent of them are women. This is terrible.” |
Damage Caused | Next time I will include more different language features. | I have used negative intent in my sentences to appeal to the emotions of the audience. I have incorporated statistics to highlight the damage caused by this issue in my writing. I have used a range of language features to emphasize the severity of the issue. | I think I did well in this because I have included negative intent and incorporated statistics to show the damage caused. Here is an example: “If you don’t have a good education then you probably won’t get a good job. And not have a good job could cause poverty. Would you like to live in poverty and end up getting around a dollar a day? I don’t think so. “ |
Challenge | Next time I need to include more superlatives into the text. If Statement - I could’ve included more statements about that it could get worse. | I have stated the official view of the problem. I have used superlatives to emphasize the severity of this issue.
I have used a conditional ‘If ’or an imagining statement to emphasize how this could be a bigger problem in the future. | I think I did a good job with this because I have stated the official view of the problem. Here is an example: “We have enough schools everywhere to teach everyone. So why are people, in places like Africa, still living with terrible education. And its not just in Africa. It is also all around the world.” |
Specify Problem | Next time I am going to add in more about how I feel about the problem. Viewpoint - I could’ve included more different viewpoints from other countries and how they feel about the problem. | Through my vocabulary choice, I have stated how the problem makes me feel and how it may seem to the listener. I have provided a counteracting existing viewpoint if it is appropriate. | I think this part was good because I have added in how I feel about the problem and the enormity of it. Here is an example: “People around the world do this every day of every month of every year. And we just walk past.” |
Solution | Next time I can add some more strong words to persuade the audience more. | I have stated possible solutions to the problem. I have used effective vocabulary to persuade the audience to get on board to make a difference . I have used strong words and phrases that relate to how we can fix/improve this issue. | I think this paragraph is well written because I have included some solutions to the problem and used vocabulary to try and persuade the audience. Here is an example: “We can help fix this by giving young children the quality education that they need. If you would want to fix poverty, hunger and wellbeing, what would you do?” |
Change | Next time I will add in more positive things about how the problem can be solved. | I have used an imagine/noticing sentence to persuade the audience of how things could be if we make a change. I have used positive vocabulary and phrases to inspire positive thoughts into the minds of the audience if we make a change. | I think I did well with this paragraph because I have used some imagining sentences to tell the audience what it will be like if the problem stopped. Here is an example: “It will make a big difference in society if everyone got along and people could get what they needed to survive.” |
Call to Action | Next time I will add in rhetorical questions in this part of the speech. | I have used language features such as rhetorical questions to appeal to the emotions of the audience to act now. | I think I did well because I added in some emotions about the problem. Here is an example: “We need to let people go to school because otherwise they will get terrible jobs. And if we help others get good educations then they won’t have to ask you for money.” |
Aims | Next time I will include more aims of the goal that we should achieve. | I have stated the 3 aims that I would like to see in order to achieve our overarching goal. | I think this paragraph is good because I have included some aims of the goal. Here is an example: “The aims of this goal is to get everyone that isn’t in school to get them in school. Or the people that don’t get that good of an education to get them the things that they need for a good education.” |
Act Together | Next time I think I should add in more about how we need to fix it together rather than just saying it. | I have stated how we can work together to achieve this goal. I have emphasized that we can't do this alone. | I think this is good because I have included that we should all work together to fix the problem. Here is an example: “We must work together to help all others that have bad educations get the education that they need.” |
Big Finish | I think I could’ve added in a bit more positive intent about how the problem will end if we work together. | My final chunk of writing ends on a positive note that inspires the audience to get on board and make a difference. I have incorporated a quote, slogan or a metaphor into my final chunk to empower people to make a difference. | I think this is good because i have stated a positive note about the problem ending and that we must work together to end the problem. Here is an example: “Others should be given the opportunity to learn what they need to get jobs and survive. How would you like it if you were living in places that don’t give you good education and you have to live very poorly for the rest of your life?” |